Misc Unsigned Bands - Kyle Dubs - Harpie Chords & Tabs

This is the first song i really sat down and
wrote so let me know what you think. 
My e-mail is jjdynimo@yahoo.com feel free to 
let me know what you think should be changed, 
Or just tell me a better way to tab it I'm open to 
criticism no matter if its good or bad

Intro 4/1(4 notes presecond)
e|-------------------------------------------------|
B|-------------------------------------------------|
G|---9-9--999876-6--666543-------------------------|
D|-------------------------00----------------------|
A|-------------------------00----------------------|
E|-------------------------00----------------------|

   Main Riff about 16/1( 16 notes persecond)
e|-------------------------------------------------|
B|-------------------------------------------------|
G|-------------------------------------------------|
D|---7777777755558888------------------------------|
A|---5555555533336666------------------------------|
E|-------------------------------------------------|
   Verse
e|-------------------------------------------------|
B|-------------------------------------------------|
G|-------------------------------------------------|
D|---7-7-7775-5-555-8-8-888------------------------|
A|---5-5-5553-3-333-6-6-666------------------------|
E|-------------------------------------------------|
[ Tab from: https://www.guitartabs.cc/tabs/m/misc_unsigned_bands/kyle_dubs_harpie_tab.html ]
Outro Get slower as you play going from 16/1 to2/1 at the end
then hold last note
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[7b7777777755558888----------------4------]
[5b5555555533336666----------------2------]
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play:
Intro 2x
Verse 2x
Main riff 4x
Verse 2x
Main riff 3x
Outro 1x

Lyrics.
I take my last breath
as a child is born
She only brings death
so full of scorn

Shes a just a harpie
but you know i never did see
i gave her all she wanted
but now i'm still haunted

I meet her in a bar
she looked dtf
it took me a minute
but one big wiff
and she knew
I was her next victim

Shes a just a harpie
but you know i never did see
i gave her all she wanted
but now i'm still haunted

We went to my car 
still fellin like the bmfc
she said she had a secret
said i wasn't gonna survive

I take my last breath
as a child is born
She only brings death
so full of scorn

but that was all a dream
another hit and i'll be fine
cause not everything is as it seems
not even ideas of mine
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| /   slide up
| \   slide down
| h   hammer-on
| p   pull-off
| ~   vibrato
| +   harmonic
| x   Mute note
| b   Bend
| pb  Pre-bend
| br  Bend release
| pbr Pre-bend release
| brb Bend release bend

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